My name is Melisa Shadow.I was born in SF Hospital in 9th March 1990.My dad James was a police officer but he got kicked cause he got a fight with a high rank.My mother Jessie is a nurse in Los Santos hospital.I followed the school till i graduated.I finished the university of San Fierro for Information Technology.Currently i don't have a job but i will make some naughty things to get myself a good job.I am now hoping to get inside Luciano family to get myself a good reputation and a better RP story.
and a better RP story.
How is this part related to your character (RP) story ? Do you have any idea what actually is RP Story ?
Without that part you again have 96 words, which is not 100.